Chiangmai's morning.
I woke up very early these two days in Chiangmai,before the sun rise. There was an uneasiness in my soul which made my sleeping fragmented. and I dreamed a lot, as always.
The sky of this small town at nights is usually deep blue and smooth like a mirror.without any cloud.neither any star. it's naked.the sky is naked like a flower---water lotus.
They are everywhere.the flower of Thailand.
I am trying hard to entertain myself in this familiar place. Chiangmai is my old friend,and to be frankly,there is not much thing to be exciting when you meet an old friend.nontheless, I own my peace here.
However, life could be funny as long as you want it to be .This morning, when I was walking out of a temple and made a random glance at a tree above my head, luckily I found that there were two birds strolling on the branches of the tree.I took out my camera and tried to take a photo of them ,but these creatures seemed to have a sixth sense too. With a self-pride,they just flapped their wings and fly away. Being still under the tree with my head upward to sky, now ,to my surprise, there were two squirrels running into my view,both of them in a rush for nothing. They leaped over branches and vanished into nowhere and all of this happened in a second.
When I was so curious with their whereabout and looked for them through the trees, a black fat cat finally exposed herself ,squatting on a strong branch ,the cat kept her balance meticulously. In spite of her innocent look, I at once got a clue why that two squirrels were so busy off the decent homeland of where they should have enjoyed.
Natural thing is always funny.
- Re: Natural thingposted on 11/20/2008
sorry for any mistake since I write this in hurry and my english is not so good.
Please kindly correct me..ShangYe? - Re: Natural thingposted on 11/20/2008
"I woke up very early these two days in Chiangmai", Single or Plural?
xiaoman wrote:
sorry for any mistake since I write this in hurry and my english is not so good.
Please kindly correct me..ShangYe? - posted on 11/21/2008
It's very funny.
Let me make some suggestions for your English writing.
I woke up very early these two days in Chiangmai,before the sun rise.... these last two days
*you need a space after a comma, for example, "... Chiangmai, before..."
There was an uneasiness in my soul which made my sleeping fragmented.... made my sleep fragmented
or, fragmented my sleep
The sky of this small town at nights is usually deep blue and smooth like a mirror.without any cloud.neither any star. it's naked.the sky is naked like a flower---water lotus.... at night
... like a flower--water lotus (two - in a dash)
*you need one or two space after a period (sentence)
and to be frankly,there is not much thing to be exciting when you meet an old friend.to be frank (but it's better to leave it out)
... there is nothing to be excited about when ...
made a random glance at a tree above my head,... casual glance ...
With a self-pride,they just flapped their wings and fly away.With dignity
... flew away.
Being still under the tree with my head upward to sky, now ,to my surprise, there were two squirrels running into my view,both of them in a rush for nothing.Standing still ... to my surprise, I saw two squirrels ...
They leaped over branches... over the branches
the cat kept her balance meticulously.keeping her balance meticulously
I at once got a clue why that two squirrels... those two squirrels
Natural thing is always funny.The nature is funny? The natural creatures are funny? Nature's creatures are funny? - Re: Natural thingposted on 11/21/2008
xixi..thanks to both of you,especially A-shan.:)
- posted on 11/21/2008
阿姗说的以外的再挑几个哈,mostly style rather than grammar:
There was an uneasiness in my soul which made my sleeping fragmented.... soul that fragmented ...
and to be franklyand frankly
However, life could be funny as long as you want it to be.Life, however, could ...
so curious with their whereaboutso curious about ...
the decent homeland of where they should have enjoyed.... homeland that ... - posted on 11/21/2008
Let me join the race to pick on you. :-)
Don't be discouraged by grammars. Just keeping reading and writing. Non-native speakers probably will never be able to avoid little mistakes but need not worry too much - there are editors. What is more important is what you write.
Here is one example of little things:
"before the sun rise" ...
Correct expression should be either "before the sun rises" (notice the verb in singular) or "before sunrise" (one word without the definite article).
- Re: Natural thingposted on 11/21/2008
I think in this circumstance Shang Ye is wise enough pretending to be half-dead. - Re: Natural thingposted on 11/21/2008
咖啡客助人为乐、喜闻乐见的三大好事:
催鹿希交作业,替小曼改作业,给圣都德布置作业:) - posted on 11/23/2008
She was walking on a brisk rhythm when I saw her approaching on a narrow lane.Golden sunshine of morning fell on her body ,which had a nice shape.She dressed nicely and in fashion.A blonde,young and healthy.
I stood at the spot where I first saw her and waited, with my camera in hands, I had a temporary fight with my impulse of shooting her.Glistening light of her hairs and her skin, blue sky and surrounding southerneast plants,she and the background in where she was made a nice picture of exotics.
But I hold it and just waited.
At last, she was getting very close to me and lifted her head.No one else but two of us.Her eyes landed on me, a smilling asian woman.I could see myself in the picture too and made it better.
She smiled in return,like a rose in blossom and I suddenly said:"you are beautiful."
So naturally she replied me with thank you and at the same time kept walking.Now,she was behind and I ,being self-content on an imagination of her happiness, also walked on.
How could I flirt with a strange woman just like that? I thought of Anna spontaneously and I knew it's her who had planted an affection toward women in me.
We should love each other.Poor women we are.
P.S. Anna is the main persona of the novelwritten by Lessin who is the owner of Noble-Prize on Literature last year. - Re: A strange woman and Annaposted on 11/23/2008
haha...thanks to Ba Ye and Fu Sheng.hug you guys..please go on. - posted on 11/23/2008
得,睡不着觉,接着pick on xiaoman吧,这哪还是替小曼改作业,明明是小曼给留作业嘛:)
She was walking on a brisk rhythm when I saw her approaching on a narrow lane.... in a brisk rhythm ... from a narrow lane.
Golden sunshine of morning fell on her body ,which had a nice shape.The golden sunlight ... on her curvy figure. [to avoid using 'nice' twice in a row]
She dressed nicely and in fashion.A blonde,young and healthy.... and fashionably. A ...
I stood at the spot where I first saw her and waited, with my camera in hands, I had a temporary fight with my impulse of shooting her.I stood where I ... in hands.[or ;] I had a passing struggle with my impulse to shoot her. [maybe "take a picture of her"? "shoot her" could also mean with a gun :)]
Glistening light of her hairs and her skin, blue sky and surrounding southerneast plants,she and the background in where she was made a nice picture of exotics.The glistening ..., the blue sky and the surrounding southeast Asian plants, she and the background would make a nice exotic picture.
But I hold it and just waited.... hold my camera ...
At last, she was getting very close to me and lifted her head.... she got very ...
I could see myself in the picture too and made it better.... too, which would make it even better.
She smiled in return,like a rose in blossom and I suddenly said:"you are beautiful."... blossom, and ... said, ...
So naturally she replied me with thank you and at the same time kept walking.... she replied thank you ...
Now,she was behind and I ,being self-content on an imagination of her happiness, also walked on.Now, she had passed me and I, content with my imagination ... ["she was behind me" feels more like she was walking in the same direction]
How could I flirt with a strange woman just like that?... a stranger woman ... [same in the title]
I thought of Anna spontaneously and I knew it's her who had planted an affection toward women in me.I thought of Anna [or Anna came to mind] immediately ... it was she who ...
P.S. Anna is the main persona of the novel written by Lessin who is the owner of Noble-Prize on Literature last year.... main heroine of ... who was the winner of Nobel Prize in ...
- Re: Natural thingposted on 11/23/2008
小曼在泰国,捏把汗。前段那里几乎爆发边境战争,最近总理府被反对派占领,明天还会有
去国会大游行,小满别去曼谷哟,万一开枪可不是闹着玩的。 - posted on 11/26/2008
我检讨,我这个懒学生,直到今天才把各位老师的批改从头到尾看了一遍(主要之前在网吧,不好看)。汗啊。N多错误。
以后还要常写,然后让你们常改。嘿嘿。
有些错误是我本来就不确定的,例如标点符号,经常不知道在哪里标。
有些错误,之前就被指出过,例如那个nicely and fashionably.记得上次尼泊尔那篇文章就犯过同样的错误。:(
有些纯粹是粗心大意,flew away。:((
至于浮生最后那个诺贝尔奖得主,我是在is 和 was之间考虑过的,其实,还真有点不明白,为啥不能用is.
废名老师,我真的差点不能按时回来呢。运气还算不错。
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