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wrote:
We need an editor to make the story more coherent, at least the characters or the narrative voice. Right now it is more like sections of stories told from different perspectives. Since Episode Lucy, the introduction of characters is very sudden and often without warning. Susan should assign someone to edit it. I recommend ʮһ or MM.