night wrote:
This is a quite good article with lots of great ideas. Thank you, July.
But i am alittle bit uncomfortable with the structure of the work. It is seems that you started with a remote historical discourse and ended it with your personal sentiments with a great deal of lyricism. Although there is a very deep connection contentwise, there are technically no strong integration of the historicism and lyricism. the senstaion of the article goes to two extreme directions---the historical and the lyricism, the big it and the small it.
In my oppinion, if you blend your person lyrics into the big historical context even starting from the Part I, that will sound more intriguing and challenging for readers. You have already got everything, just missing the blending. I wonder if you agree with this.