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Re: 鎽樿瘧鍑犻椴佺背鐨勫洓琛岃瘲 | Nov 20 2007

琦儿 wrote:
来看看鲁米和八兄：-)

Its about time. :-)

有些诗句翻译得很漂亮，有些诗句似乎还可以再修改。
我有时只会挑剔，不会改。比如这一首的第三句：“让蜡烛熄灭在阳光下”似乎还可以再斟酌。

说得很是。这首大概可改作

8，她让你看见了她的脸

Now that your lover has shown you her face,
Extinguish yourself at her feet, my heart.
Put out the candle that burns in the sun,
And with you dies this sorrow: moan no more.

她让你看见了她的脸，
停息吧，你的心，仆伏在她脚前。
太阳出来了，吹灭蜡烛吧。
再不叹息，再不遗憾。