盘旋
一条轨迹
飞入空中
捆绑 鞭挞
一朵不出声的
蓝色
它前世的雪花
守在新年的
路口
哭成一场雪
你将一枚
飞过整个世纪的
羽毛
举过头顶
有只目盲
失忆的
鸟
在我的眼泪里
盘旋
- Re: 銆愰暱璇濈煭璇淬�戠洏鏃嬨��posted on 12/29/2006
笨笨体的魅力在于：看上去漫不经意的单词
经过她这么一组合，成了具像、意象和画面
意思有些朦胧，但有时候又会
伸出一只神奇的小爪
挠你的记忆
甚至暧昧
笨笨诗是一块乐感包裹着生活感的石头
看它掷向何处：天空、田野、大海、山林、墙壁、甚至自己
也可以是小溪
随后涟漪
笨笨，新年好！ - Re: 銆愰暱璇濈煭璇淬�戠洏鏃嬨��posted on 12/29/2006
嗯，诗人是天生的嘛。 - Re: 銆愰暱璇濈煭璇淬�戠洏鏃嬨��posted on 12/29/2006
笨笨最近试虐恋了? :-)
笨笨 wrote:
捆绑 鞭挞
一朵不出声的
蓝色
- Re: 銆愰暱璇濈煭璇淬�戠洏鏃嬨��posted on 01/03/2007
若之,以后咖啡问候语就是:
"您虐恋了吗?" :)
问候慧元. 木匠好.
Ruozhi wrote:
笨笨最近试虐恋了? :-)
笨笨 wrote:
捆绑 鞭挞
一朵不出声的
蓝色
- posted on 01/03/2007
问候楼上各位,笨笨,若之,慧元,木匠新年好.
若之好幽默.:))也谢谢你的问候.(我在哪条线读到,记不清了.)
看来'虐恋'的确需要一个咖啡单间.
或者把你的钢琴教师的线再钓出来作个临时单间.
benben wrote:
若之,以后咖啡问候语就是:
"您虐恋了吗?" :)
问候慧元. 木匠好.
Ruozhi wrote:
笨笨最近试虐恋了? :-)
笨笨 wrote:
捆绑 鞭挞
一朵不出声的
蓝色
- Re: 銆愰暱璇濈煭璇淬�戠洏鏃嬨��posted on 01/03/2007
若之满逗的。
笨笨有两节感情过于强烈和明确。Sound like New Year New Resolution, huh?
- posted on 01/03/2007
笨笨 wrote:
一条轨迹
飞入空中
捆绑 鞭挞
一朵不出声的
蓝色
It is superb! I can imagine me throwing rope into air and catch whatever my imagination catches.
But poem-wise, it can be too creative or off the wall.
它前世的雪花
守在新年的
路口
哭成一场雪
你将一枚
飞过整个世纪的
羽毛
举过头顶
有只目盲
失忆的
鸟
在我的眼泪里
盘旋
- Re: 銆愰暱璇濈煭璇淬�戠洏鏃嬨��posted on 01/04/2007
devil wrote:
But poem-wise, it can be too creative. Does the author have any idea of what I mean by being too creative?
Hm, "too creative", a devil thinks of a poet. And he asks the "Author" whether she undertood what he meant by "creative". hm. :)
Luckily I am not the "too creative""Author". Oh my goodness. :) - Re: 銆愰暱璇濈煭璇淬�戠洏鏃嬨��posted on 01/04/2007
令胡冲 wrote:
Is it too challenging to you? :)
There's a fine line between creativity and too much of it. And sometimes you have the feeling that there's creativity for creativity's sake. It's hard for any artist. I'm sure Ben Ben knows what I'm talking about even though we may disagree on when and where it applies. - Re: 銆愰暱璇濈煭璇淬�戠洏鏃嬨��posted on 01/04/2007
笨笨尽管取名盘旋，仍然没有动起来的意思，我觉得是一个snapshot，静物写生。 - posted on 01/04/2007
ben ben wrote:
你们的话，我都懂。就是不信。
包括若之的“虐恋”也懂？:)
我没完没了表白都表白不清楚的事儿，我在这儿没说，令胡倒看出来啦？没有可能。
若之、华好象都看出来了。我怎么就不能看出来。再说，当局者迷，旁观者清，我就没有可能比笨笨更了解笨笨的短诗？你可别瞧不起我们江湖汉子。虽然不写诗，但这里的诗人要是编一串诗线下来，我们没准能一一给你们分门别类呢。诗人自己恐怕都不见得分得清谁跟谁。
新年我们要吹新新牛，更上一台阶。:)
不过做好人是挺难的，今天我睡过了。错过了开会。头儿说，没事儿，睡吧，我们也没说什么。这里面只有两个字是我编的:)
哪两个字？:)) - Re: 銆愰暱璇濈煭璇淬�戠洏鏃嬨��posted on 01/04/2007
我什么都懂。怎么了。
数一数，不就知道了。
:-)
令胡冲 wrote:>哪两个字？:)) - Re: 銆愰暱璇濈煭璇淬�戠洏鏃嬨��posted on 01/06/2007
新年顶笨笨：）
它前世的雪花
守在新年的
路口
哭成一场雪
My favor part :)
- Re: 銆愰暱璇濈煭璇淬�戠洏鏃嬨��posted on 01/07/2007
呵呵，额觉着是My least favor part.
雪花哭成雪，同意反复。
July wrote:
新年顶笨笨：）
它前世的雪花
守在新年的
路口
哭成一场雪
My favor part :)
- Re: 銆愰暱璇濈煭璇淬�戠洏鏃嬨��posted on 01/08/2007
good idea! 笨笨，您虐恋了吗？:-)
benben wrote:
若之,以后咖啡问候语就是:
"您虐恋了吗?"
华，“钢琴教师”是玛雅的最爱。 我是“叶公好龙”。：-）
令胡到现在才发现我“满逗的？”白在江湖上跟你认识了。:-)
- Re: 銆愰暱璇濈煭璇淬�戠洏鏃嬨��posted on 01/08/2007
RuoZhi: 您虐恋了吗？:-)
Ruozhi wrote:
good idea! 笨笨，您虐恋了吗？:-)
benben wrote:华，“钢琴教师”是玛雅的最爱。 我是“叶公好龙”。：-）
若之,以后咖啡问候语就是:
"您虐恋了吗?"
令胡到现在才发现我“满逗的？”白在江湖上跟你认识了。:-)
- Re: 銆愰暱璇濈煭璇淬�戠洏鏃嬨��posted on 01/08/2007
我也最喜欢这几句，尽管不敢说完全明白是什么意思。
July wrote:
新年顶笨笨：）
它前世的雪花
守在新年的
路口
哭成一场雪
My favor part :)
- Re: 銆愰暱璇濈煭璇淬�戠洏鏃嬨��posted on 01/09/2007
大家都 都 虐 虐恋了吗？：））） - Re: 銆愰暱璇濈煭璇淬�戠洏鏃嬨��posted on 01/10/2007
ben ben wrote:
大家都 都 虐 虐恋了吗？：）））
那得看这个虐恋是如何定义的了。如果虐恋的特征物是黑皮衣裤、面具、手铐和皮鞭，答案是没有过。或者象若之对王小波的王二的解读，可能也没有过，太复杂。如果是在网上网下天南海北地折腾，听说有网友有过。 - Re: 銆愰暱璇濈煭璇淬�戠洏鏃嬨��posted on 01/11/2007
benben 好，有没有一个地方可以看到妳贴出来的全部诗？(other than using the search function here)。谢！
- posted on 01/12/2007
呀，多谢RZP记得我。我的诗没意思。看它们还不如听PARIS HILTON呢。这儿好象有人听。给你这个。
http://www.metrolyrics.com/lyrics/2147434150/Paris_Hilton/I_Want_You
I Want You
(JR)
Excuse me I think I've seen you on the dance floor
Excuse me I think they're playin' one of our songs
I seen you you've been here a lot of times
And you've been on my mind cause baby your just so damn fine
What do you say
What will it take
To make you see that I'm not playin'
I want you
and I think you should know
I want you
and I wont let you go
Cause I'm the kind of girl who likes to tell you what I want in life
I'll get right up in your face and wont you like that anyway
I want you
so before you go home
And you leave here alone
I thought you should know
The night's young
And baby I'm just getting started
So don't go 'cause I'm feeling open hearted
And I could give you everything you need
You'll be living in a dream
If you were waking up next to me
Give me a chance
How 'bout a dance
I promise you you won't regret it
I want you
and I think you should know
I want you
and I wont let you go
Cause I'm the kind of girl who likes to tell you what I want in life
I'll get right up in your face and wont you like that anyway
I want you
so before you go home
And you leave here alone
I thought you should know
Na Na Na Na Na Na Na Na (x2)
When your lookin like that and Im feelin like this, you make my head spin round and I wanna kiss (x2)
What do you say
What will it take
To make you see that I'm not playin'
I want you
and I think you should know
I want you
and I wont let you go
Cause I'm the kind of girl who likes to tell you what I want in life
I'll get right up in your face and wont you like that anyway
I want you
so before you go home
And you leave here alone
I thought you should know
Na Na Na Na Na Na Na Na (I want you) (x4)
- Re: 銆愰暱璇濈煭璇淬�戠洏鏃嬨��posted on 01/12/2007
where is the utube song?
i like her
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