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Posted by
longspeak on 01/21/2008. longspeak commented 5 times.
看着这些字就漾起口水。呵呵。
第一条准确,这是迁客们的无奈。
第二条有意思。
求批,谢还来不及呢。

Posted by
xw on 01/21/2008. longspeak commented once.
充满正义。Solute.
过于直白了些。还是那句话:正义不能替代诗意。修一修该不错的。

Posted by
笨笨 on 01/17/2008. longspeak commented 3 times.
山重复了。有意?
后一句有点怪怪的。
飞驰就够了,干吗还要距离?
多余的解释。
这结尾的算术还有些味道。
不要中若缺的毒啊。

Posted by
笨笨 on 12/21/2007. longspeak commented once.
agree, last section should be reconsidered, or simply cut.

Posted by
笨笨 on 11/28/2007. longspeak commented once.
Like this part too.
"Sorry I drank too much the other day." Lame excuse. ^_^

Posted by
July on 11/14/2007. longspeak commented once.
比较佩服悟空超时代的隐形技术、克隆技术、激光与X光技术。

Posted by
自立 on 11/13/2007. longspeak commented 4 times.
楼上的,住在洛杉矶的该是郑的妹妹吧?
这是个情色重于是非的庸俗时代,如之奈何?
已忍身前辱
那堪劫后凌
由来两精卫
孽海自谁平

Posted by
八十一子 on 11/02/2007. longspeak commented 2 times.
也觉得八爷的示例中逻辑不很明晰。
中土五千年战争与和平的历史以及人口演变的结果似乎是存留的基因以利己为主,斥异与宽容就很难说了。“慷慨悲歌的燕赵大地,温文婉约的江南水乡”只是个过往的模糊表象而已。以汉人而言,蒙古、清、日本人入侵时,抵抗的是南人酷烈还是北人酷烈?做汉奸伪军的是南人多还是北人多?国共两党的中坚是南人多还是北人多?
关于生存演化,以前编过几行歪字,生硬,不过跟这题目多少有点关联,贴这里,也算一家之言,也供批判吧,呵呵:
余孽
掩于草际的瓜豆
径行老去
这些褐色的

Posted by
lucy on 10/02/2007. longspeak commented once.
在那里打工时爬过一次。Boring to death.
附近其它有趣的山峰多了去了。
没想到也有响尾蛇。

Posted by
笨笨 on 10/02/2007. longspeak commented 2 times.
年龄和阅历增长,蜕变是必然的。
她开始让人头痛了。

Posted by
xw on 09/30/2007. longspeak commented once.
Saw both lately, the first one in local botanic garden and the latter in Low's. Do they have Chinese names?

Posted by
笨笨 on 09/22/2007. longspeak commented once.
Nice,very nice. I like it.

Posted by
阿拉丁燃灯 on 09/15/2007. longspeak commented once.
附和一把。
还以为你在美国住。

Posted by
笨笨 on 09/13/2007. longspeak commented once.
何事合成愁?
提一下。

Posted by
ben ben on 09/12/2007. longspeak commented once.
一种懒汉体裁,易于学习,适合发散思维,or clueless mind。
完全同意楼上绿茶的看法,体裁是末端,关键还是看内涵。就象同一个式样的衣裙,有人穿了疲遢,有人穿了回头率很高。

Posted by
笨笨 on 09/05/2007. longspeak commented 2 times.
这个好。
这个比喻平俗,也用滥了,放这里倒是不错的铺垫,正好形成反衬。

Posted by
WOA on 08/30/2007. longspeak commented once.
Well said. It's always a good altitude to keep an open mind, explore what I don't know, and turn them into "I know", and keep going. The moment we claim "I know it all" or "I don't want to know", we are shutting the door to things "I don't know", and we are forssilating ourselves.
Also, I am amused by the following:
"Contemporary poets are skeptical and suspicious even, or perhaps especially, about themselves. They publicly confess to being poets only reluctantly, as if they were a little as

Posted by
longspeak on 08/29/2007. longspeak commented 2 times.
谢谢华、教授和象罔的肯定。
请PhD时的老板两口子到家里做客,临了现摘了些土产,老俩口高高兴兴地带走了。事后编了这个带点"teasing"意味的游戏之辞-当然是tease自己的挣扎经历啦。
不知楼上的教授有没有逼过学生进墙壁?:-)

Posted by
华 on 08/26/2007. longspeak commented once.
今天刚看到一篇辨析意象与意境的短文,说到“有意无象”和“有象无意”的问题。觉得华这篇有点偏向“有意无象”了。瞎说说奥。

Posted by
笨笨 on 08/10/2007. longspeak commented once.
感到这几句不够“湿”意,有点干巴。不过,象你上面讲的,“其实写的人有特点,看的人也有。”所以。。。
其实写字本来就是很自我的事情,没法讨好迎合或附会所有人 (套那谁的话:这年头写诗跟做暗娼一样,是见不得熟人上不得台面的事,不象嫖客,好歹可能是坊间的身份人)。所以想自在,就必须皮儿厚实些,管它别人怎么评说,做本色的自己,谁的都听着,但都当过耳风穿墙屁,想怎么着就怎么着便是。

Posted by
守望古典 on 07/19/2007. longspeak commented once.
古典写得挺诱惑人的。问一下:冬天那里气候怎样?先谢啦。

Posted by
xw on 06/26/2007. longspeak commented once.
那红辣椒也没切一下,怎么入味?就摆着好看吗?
我家LD也不时去瞧毛毛妈--名人哪。可惜总学不出样子,反有邯郸学步之虞。倒是随便清炒的秋葵一家人都喜欢。:-)

Posted by
lucy on 10/16/2006. longspeak commented once.
Thanks. No hurry. It's too late this year anyway.

Posted by
笨笨 on 11/08/2005. longspeak commented once.
怎麼笨笨的詩討論討論著就成了小趙幫助會呢﹖
繼續談詩﹕笨寫長了﹐觀念先行﹐就把靈氣掩蓋了﹐讀者們不習慣了。
繼續跟風﹐跟個短點的﹕
秋
如果阳光的弧线饱满
天空饱满 天空的蓝色饱满
胡杨的叶片灿黄饱满
山形饱满 山川的吐纳饱满
流水的声音饱满
虹鳟和漱流的枕石饱满
山松的籽粒饱满
麋鹿的卵巢和茸角饱满
如果四万里外
老芋地的沟垄充实饱满
如果秋风所呈现的事实和真相
都趋近充实饱满
流浪者 这个秋天
你的肺腑与胸襟
還有什麼理由不趋向饱满

Posted by
玛雅 on 08/25/2005. longspeak commented once.
What makes a person suffer is that his/her heart is not where his/her body is. I am afraid that the cafemaid is still expecting too much from life, although she claims the opposite.
No party last forever, just enjoy the moment, people.

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